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today
we're younger
than we're ever gonna
be.


i. and we finally did it,
drove to the mountains
watched meteors
and let the mattress
grow damp
under our love
under the stars

ii. there are things to
be reconciled

iii. my eyes sting like
chlorine, but from
crying,

I finally disappointed
them;
the highest order of shame

iv. but you cannot put
people into pockets;
good, bad
don't mix
with them


v. and I cannot choose
who I love

vi. your lenses are straight,
elite and proud
mine, open and accumulating
filth

vii. maybe
I should run away more often,
we never talk like this

viii. and you have to realise
that I live in a world
that you don't, and you
live in one I
cannot

ix. the respect is there,
but I cannot
be stifled
any longer.
growing?

As I've been reminded, best to note the first stanza is courtesy of Regina Spektor.
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Given 2012-09-21
The respect is there, but the connection between people is not. Hubris. Powerful poetry from *staphysagria ( Featured by Nichrysalis )
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imaduckyrawr Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
this is so fantastic.
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Karinta Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012  Student General Artist
It really makes one think, doesn't it?
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smallsmiles Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2012
The whole of it is beautiful. :heart:
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staphysagria Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you, lovely. <3
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addoodler Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2012
DUDE I LOVE REGINA SPEKTOR!!! PLUS I JUST LISTENED TO SMALL TOWN MOON!!!
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schriftsteller Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2012   Writer
This is simply stunning-- in the oldest sense of the word. Each new stanza brought my thoughts to a hault before letting them continue with the next. The break up the stanzas with the roman numerals is brilliant here. It could flow as an entire poem, I'm sure you're aware, but breaking it up makes it even better. This tells a story in the most wonderful way. Congrats on your very well deserved DD!
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staphysagria Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you, dearie. <3
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schriftsteller Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2012   Writer
Quite welcome! It's really a lovely poem. :)
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rataafalava Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
thank you for the great read.
congrats on the DD!
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Ayumi-Nemera Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This sounds like something my mother would have told her parents when she left town at 18. It took me 2 reads to see the story behind the art, but you mesh them beautifully. you take what society calls 'young love' and turned it into something that helps open their eyes to reality.

I'm really touched by this piece actually. :')
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