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today
we're younger
than we're ever gonna
be.


i. and we finally did it,
drove to the mountains
watched meteors
and let the mattress
grow damp
under our love
under the stars

ii. there are things to
be reconciled

iii. my eyes sting like
chlorine, but from
crying,

I finally disappointed
them;
the highest order of shame

iv. but you cannot put
people into pockets;
good, bad
don't mix
with them


v. and I cannot choose
who I love

vi. your lenses are straight,
elite and proud
mine, open and accumulating
filth

vii. maybe
I should run away more often,
we never talk like this

viii. and you have to realise
that I live in a world
that you don't, and you
live in one I
cannot

ix. the respect is there,
but I cannot
be stifled
any longer.
growing?

As I've been reminded, best to note the first stanza is courtesy of Regina Spektor.
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Given 2012-09-21
The respect is there, but the connection between people is not. Hubris. Powerful poetry from *staphysagria ( Featured by Nichrysalis )
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imaduckyrawr Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
this is so fantastic.
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Karinta Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012  Student General Artist
It really makes one think, doesn't it?
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smallsmiles Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2012
The whole of it is beautiful. :heart:
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staphysagria Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you, lovely. <3
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addoodler Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2012
DUDE I LOVE REGINA SPEKTOR!!! PLUS I JUST LISTENED TO SMALL TOWN MOON!!!
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schriftsteller Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2012   Writer
This is simply stunning-- in the oldest sense of the word. Each new stanza brought my thoughts to a hault before letting them continue with the next. The break up the stanzas with the roman numerals is brilliant here. It could flow as an entire poem, I'm sure you're aware, but breaking it up makes it even better. This tells a story in the most wonderful way. Congrats on your very well deserved DD!
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staphysagria Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you, dearie. <3
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schriftsteller Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2012   Writer
Quite welcome! It's really a lovely poem. :)
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rataafalava Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
thank you for the great read.
congrats on the DD!
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Ayumi-Nemera Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This sounds like something my mother would have told her parents when she left town at 18. It took me 2 reads to see the story behind the art, but you mesh them beautifully. you take what society calls 'young love' and turned it into something that helps open their eyes to reality.

I'm really touched by this piece actually. :')
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staphysagria Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm glad. Thank you, dear. :hug:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2012   General Artist
Congratulations on the DD, ever amazing person! :la:
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Kaz-D Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Fantastic work! Cognrats on the DD :)
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riparii Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2012
Look who I found in the DDs this morning. What a fine thing. :)
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staphysagria Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
A fine thing indeed! Thank you. :heart:
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Nice work. I liked the way your sections just crash into each other. Congrats on the DD! :)
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Lit-Twitter Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2012
Chirp, congrats on the DD, it's been twittered. [link] :)
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brassteeth Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2012
Wow, what an interesting piece. Congratulations on the D.D! Yes it is powerful. Love the layout.
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Shannon-Sweeney Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Your beautiful poem has been featured here [link]
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staphysagria Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks lovely, I'll check it out. :hug:
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Shannon-Sweeney Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome :hug:
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MeineSehnsucht Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2012   Writer
Hello Regina Spektor.
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staphysagria Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm glad you recognised the first stanza. Such a good album, don't you think?
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MeineSehnsucht Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012   Writer
It's pretty alright, I think. At first, I thought it was a little disappointing, but I do like it now. 'Firewood' is my favourite. Have you heard the new Fiona Apple?
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2012
These are such beautiful memories,
all the gratitude for you and for sharing.
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fervvent Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
vii. maybe
I should run away more often,
we never talk like this


vii & viii are so powerful,
love this. :heart:
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megsmad Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2012
always growing

:heart: faved
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: Featured: [link] :heart:
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
but you cannot put
people into pockets


There is always [at least] a line in your work that just shines so perfectly. That one is very true, dear, and the rest is absolutely perfect. :heart:
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KissTheSunrise Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2012
Respect is enough. Yah, this is growing up. I used to live with people who would give me the feeling you've described. I left, long ago.
"vii. maybe
I should run away more often,
we never talk like this"
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placidempathy Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Interesting arrangement. Me gusta. Wrote the following blurb after reading:

disappointment's an old friend of me
never more than a moment away
but it's better to feel something
than to live in a world of grey
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